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TRIOLETS

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Thanks to my friend PaulJ
Today I learned about Triolets!

For those new to this verse here's what you do. Create an 8 line verse with the following rules:
Line 1 - ............
Line 2 - ............
Line 3 - Rhymes with Line 1
Line 4 - Identical to Line 1
Line 5 - Rhymes with Line 1
Line 6 - Rhymes with Line 2
Line 7 - Identical to Line 1
Line 8 - Identical to Line 2

Thought I'd give it a try-olay :)

I look into the mirror and cry
Who is that strange lady?
Why does she stare with her beady eye
I look into the mirror and cry.
I toss my head and heave a sigh
She is old and grey and slightly shady.
I look into the mirror and cry
Who is that strange lady?

Go for it Sue 8)
 
I will - but this looks harder to me...............I gottta make it RHYME!!

But - ya know me................I gotta have a go...........
 
Lost

I feel so lost
Since you left me alone
To one side I was tossed
I feel so lost
I was counting the cost
Feeling lonely at home
I feel so lost
Since you left me alone

Have I done it? .......i will have a better attempt later when I have more time

Sue (probationary trioleter)
 
ONE MORE FOR YOUR BOOK!

You are AMAZING!!! It took me hours to do mine :)
 
Rules

Its rules that I crave for,
They help me to write.
Pen to paper, feel the words pour.
Its rules that I crave for.
I will try to limit, unless asked for more
Trying my best, can't you feel my plight?
Its rules that I crave for
They help me to write

Sue (work for me now!)

K8 - you can tell you spent more time on yours - yours has depth, and more meaning, mine is very immature compared to yours..........I really will attempt a more serious one.................Anyhow - wheres the maestos attempt?

Paulllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllll?


Over to you too POM............................
 
YOU TOO KIND

Sue - yours are great and you are just being modest ain't you?

I also look forward to Chris, Kandy and PaulJ joining in the fray 8)
 
Goodnight Grandad

Its hard to explain to a child
About death and the loss of a loved one
Their hearts are so meek and mild
Its hard to explain to a child
Granddad died, as he slept, though he smiled
His face relieved from the pain that had gone
Its hard to explain to a child
About death, and the loss of a loved one
 
Many men know how to flatter
Few men know how to praise
Shallow worship doesnt really matter
Many men know how to flatter
Untrue words, can self esteem shatter
Struck down with one hollow phrase
Many men know how to flatter
Few men know how to praise

Not really from the heart - but just dabbling with my signature - sorry men :oops:
 
Hey Sue & Kate,
What's it like to be brilliant??
Thought your attemps a triolets were great 10/10 8)
 
You do something to me

You do something to me,
Somewhere deep inside.
You make me feel so free.
You do something to me.
Its a love we cannot see,
And its a love we cannot hide,
You do something to me,
Somewhere deep inside.

I was just listening to Paul Wellers song - You do something to me - and I thought the lyrics were a triolet.......but they were not.........so Ive adapted the lyrics to make it into a triolet .............slight plagerism I know.......but its a lovey track and worthy of being a triolet

You do something to me
something deep inside
I'm hanging on the wire
for a love I'll never find
You do something wonderful
then chase it all away
Mixing my emotions
that throws me back again
Click to expand...
 
The cost of war

Is war really needed I often wonder
Do we gain? Do we lose? What is the cost?
More young lives to be torn asunder?
Is war really needed I often wonder
Count the minds that will buckle under
the strain and torment, seeing good pals lost
Is war really needed I often wonder
Do we gain? Do we lose? What IS the cost?
 
Sue, your talent overwhelms me! Where on earth do I find your next challenge??? :)
 
The art of poetry

I dont think its talent K8 so much as structure.

Writing poems like this, reminds me of writing an essay/assignment/report.........its just following a format.
I suppose everyone finds their own way - and this structure assists me

Infact, I think this is a way of encouraging people to write poetry. Not the Johns, Rods, Les's, Jerry's etc of this world - who can write 'au naturale', but, certainly people like me who struggle with a blank piece of paper, it just might be worth them having a go at Haikus or Triolets.

Triolets do remind me of music - songs - they sort of have that ring to them
 
Songbird

:) Sue, have you considered Writing a "Song" :?:

From your Natural "Gifts" plain to see by most on here,, Good Judges :!:

Your Form, structure, wordage-meaning, Rythm comes bang on
This is from "Within" not formatted, formal learned stuff (Don,t B,,sh.. a B,,sh,, ter) :oops:

Your next challenge :!: ps Loads of Spondulux when Famous (Ahem 10%) :wink:
 
Oh here's a challenge..

Write a Poem with the actual word 'Poem' in the line
Then find a word to rhyme with it..
 
I write a poem as I sit
And thats the word that rhymes with IT

There ya go Les......... I'll meet you in the Boyz Troilets for a fag later.
 
If I could write a poem
that would surely show 'em
I'm no Aussie git! 8)
 
Just for Les..................

When I put pen to paper and write a poem
Which ends in that very word!
If successful will I get a Jeroboam?
When I put pen to paper and write a poem
Not the sinful king Jeroboam
But the four fifths of a gallon (of wine) is preferred
When I put pen to paper and write a poem
Which ends in that very word!



My thanks to Google for this triolet :wink:
 
Back to Backs

Back to backs here we come,
meeting up with friends on the day
Excitment is building, and I'm bringing my mum
Back to backs here we come.
Les is buying the drinks and we're all having rum,
on those narrow steep stairs we will sway.
Back to backs here we come,
meeting up with friends on the day!
 
Post Back to Backs

It was a lovely day out, we all had fun
We must do it all again real soon
Where did we go? the Back to Backs in Brum!
It was a lovely day out, we all had fun
Ken and Ted were there, and out came the Sun
It was a truely splendid afternoon!
It was a lovely day out, we all had fun
We must do it all again real soon


Sincerity ruled, and humanity too
people sharing their history and tales
The meet up being so long overdue
Sincerity ruled, and humanity too
For the drinks, to Les and John we say 'thank you'
they are also the most handsomest of males( :roll: I lie but it has to rhyme
with line 2!!!!!!)
Sincerity ruled, and humanity too
people sharing their history and tales


Its fun to meet up, BHWR OK!
But we thought of the people not there :cry:
some ill and some living a long way away
Its fun to meet up, BHWR OK!
Paul came along with his FCUK :twisted:
and Rod with his beatle-like hair
Its fun to meet up, BHWR OK!
But we thought of the people not there :cry:
 
Ecky thump you lot, are you aiming to give me a heart attack.
I am not even going to try that thingy that you compose.
Remembering my name is hard enough.

Robert
 
:angel: Hey this thread must have started when I was A.W.O.L for a while.
Well you asked for it ... :2funny: :2funny:


I’ll have to try this once
To try it I’ll have to do
to show that I’m no dunce
I’ll have to try this once
I‘m feeling a proper ponce
I’m doing this just for you
I’ll have to try this once
To try it I’ll have to do

I think I have it right
You’ll just have to check
To have achieve this I feel delight
I think I have it right
Please help me in my plight
It’s making me a nervous wreck
I think I have it right
You’ll just have to check


Well I think I followed the rules, didn't I ???

Chris :angel:
 
By george I think you've done it!
I'm off again you see :-[
Triolets are a great big hit
by george i think you've done it.
By now i'd thought I'd really quit
and the obcession had set me free
By george I think you've done it
I'm off again you see!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 
Wisdom is for wise folk
A friend of mine once said
no truer words were spoke
wisdom is for wise folk
'wraps around you like a cloak
no need to be well read'
wisdom is for wise folk
a friend of mine once said
 
I feel a haikus coming on
I'll have to find the thread
blame is laid at the feet of Pom
I feel a haikus coming on
I cannot leave til the feelings gone
I'll have to just stay here instead
I feel a haikus coming on
I'll have to find the thread
 
:angel:

Sue my friend
Your addiction is back
For this state to occur I did not intend
Sue my friend
Your ways you’ll have to mend
Or Rod will give you a smack
Sue my Friend
Your addiction is back

Chris :angel:
 
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