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HAIKUS

K

Kate

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Wrote these two Haikus in winter 2001 as we drove through the Wombat (yes! Wombat) State Forest in Victoria, Australia. Sun came out, then it rained and sun again and the forest just glorious. If you've ever seen a wattle dripping with raindrops gleaming in the sun you'll know what I was enthusing about. Then came the beautiful sunset across the ranges. Wow!
Haikus (for those who don't know) are of Japanese origin, contain 17 syllables and 3 lines. First line 5 syllables, second line 7 and third 5 syllables. The subject must be nature or seasons or words to indicate seasons (wattle=spring) and in the present tense. They don't rhyme.

The wattle basked
in the sun’s admiring rays
droplets of pure gold.

and..

Blood red sun sinking
behind distant mountain range
fleeing misting rain.
 
Yikes - just realised one of them is not in the present tense. I'll be disbarred forever from the Haikus Association of the Would be Poets (Inc) Japan :wink: Also too many "the" words!! Back to the drawing board. :)
 
Hari Katie?

:shock: Oh Katie ,,,Don,t do it cuz WE love you :)

No ritual Hari Kari,, Ooooh them sharp sword Disemb bobulating thingy

Ooooh All that mess,,, Besides you Need the Swords for your Chicken Tommy :oops:
(In your secret "Wimmins Place :wink: )

ps :) Lovely Haiku,s,, thanks & will try myself soon,, John Yxx
 
Very Interesting

Im not a poet or a story writer - but I'll have a go at most things (until they take the mic off me at kareoke)

I am in awe sometimes when I read poetry - it either touches me or it doesnt - and I never seem to know why.

I liked the 'Haikus', and look forward to reading some more, or reading peoples attempts at it...................................and you never know I might just have a go :?
 
:D Hows this Kate :?: Never tried it before five minuets ago...

May rain making way
for June’s iced chilled gusts of wind
Winter is here now

Chris :)
 
me haikus

Me toooooooooooooooooooo

Cold sharp Icicles
Knife like dripping rods of ice
Withered by the sun

:roll: is that past or present tense?
 
well done Sue - Pom watch the syllables - but I am overwhelmed! You're all honorary members of the Japanese Haiku (Inc) whatever it was... :) Seriously, it is a lovely poetry medium and makes you sit and ponder....
 
The dim Kandor

Cannot write Haikus..dunno why but my mind just doesn't work that way..
 
Have a go Jo

Dips toe into heated pool with Japaneze Monkey Grin :)

Naaa,,,not that,,, Here it is :arrow:

Autumn now leaf fall
Metaplasmically to
Hungry litter food

Mmmmh :!: JY Syanara
 
BUDS

petals shut asleep
woken by the light and heat
total exposure

Sue (Honorary member of Haiku Inc.)
 
the buffalo roam
across the plains to water
where tigers await

Sue (picking up speed)
 
Sue on a Roll?

:) Nice Haiku,s SUE,, you seem to be Au Naturelle

Aahem,, the "Bread" ending one a "Cracker"

:? Just returning your Pun y eehh eeh "On a Roll"

Fancycake tart trying to slip that past this doughNut :roll:
 
the thunder is loud
fast moving grey clouds, like they
are escaping rain

Sue (heading for a haikus breakdown)
 
C,mon M8

Yo Kandor Buddy :shock:

C,mon this should be right up your street :?:

Master of the One liners,, literal Blarney Stone Guiness ( :oops: Genius)

Think "The Blues" back line,,, 5-7-5 (You will need next year/kickass time)

Oky Dokey John :wink:

ps SUE,,, Very into it,, good stuff Gal xx :D
 
It's hard to write a
decent poem with only
seventeen sylla.. :lol:
 
Oohriggahami

:) JerryD,, sweet seventeen, difficult Eh :!: pull t,other one :wink:

Brown Belt in Origami for you, Kamikhasi kidder :oops:
 
Sue, you're a natural. You should write a book! I struggled to produce 3 over the last few years.
Pom - I can't count! :)
 
Hey baby....I'm your Kandyman...

Of course I can write Haiku's..
Just not as good as Sue..
(mind you, I only found this out last night as I'd never really tried before)

Loving you always
My heart is safe in your hands
Forever and more

Not what you deserve
Less by half or even more
But still you love me

I don't want to stop
touching, tasting, loving you
Now until my end

You give everthing
Your heart, soul, even your life
and still I want more
 
ROMANTIC HAIKUS

Whoo Kandy - very romantic! Everyone is so good at it! (Haikus I mean) :) Sue's going to write a book - do we have any illustrators? I wish I could do them so quickly! I find myself counting all the time (1, 2, 3, 4, 5 - no, that's 6!) And that gets in the way of what I was trying to say every time :lol: :lol:
 
:D By gosh I think I've got it...


Rainbows bow and bend
from each of their extreme ends
Colours to narrate

Arching, across skies
Of soft blues and dusky grey
Rainbows light our way

Chris :)
 
SOMEWHERE OVER THE RAINBOW

Chris, have just been listening to Ella Fitzgerald sing Somewhere over the Rainbow - wonderful - while hubby cooks dinner for me for Mother's Day. Just consumed some oysters doused with Worcestshire sauce - yummy!
Your haiku reminds me of a double rainbow we saw last weekend near our place. At the moment the Derwent River which we overlook is pink from the sunset. So your verse just added to the pleasure of our evening. :)
 
Counters

:D Lovely Pom/Chris ,, Can,t Antipodeans count? Katie too :roll:

3 Lines rule :?: So good yer done it twice (Twice is nice :oops: ) Aahem

Moves swiftly on ;; Remember the Old advert :wink:

Woodbine leaf roasting
Fine cut flavour tobacco
Now old yet still Counts :?:
 
dew drops hang for life
the blanket of mist ascends
its a fresh new morn

Sue (sleeping eating dreaming Haikus)
 
Turning Japanese

:) SUE,,Dew drops of Brilliance,, Beautiful, meaningfull :D

I think your turning Japanese, I think your turning Japanese,
I really think so ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,, :wink: JY
 
controlled by the wind
trees embrace the element
with arms wide open

Sue (not my fault - K8 started me off!)
 
I HAPPILY TAKE THE BLAME!

Sue - keep it coming - do you want me to type up the book? You are FANTASTIC!
 
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