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Un Punctuated

  • Thread starter Thread starter Robert Harrison
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Robert Harrison

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The Onlooker


She stood head bowed
shoulders sagged yet
rising quickly
falling just as quickly
to the beat of her sobs

He came from the bar
dead pan face
unheard abuse
one punch
she stopped sobbing
and lay quiet

And I shouted
inside
oh I shouted
but no sound came.
 
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Your poem is deep - yet I see it- It takes one poet to know another Beryl M
 
Beryl M said:
Your poem is deep - yet I see it- It takes one poet to know another Beryl M
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Beryl
I was going to call the poem "Unpunctuated", and leave the last line out.
The idea being for you to look up the meaning of Punctuated and fill in the
last line from the meaning. I am glad that I did not.

Thank you for reading it..

Robert
 
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